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She’s lying there
On her bed
The voices whisper
In her head
Nobody loves you
Nobody cares
They’d be better off
If you were not there
The blade comes out
It moves real swift
And carves up and
Down her wrist
With her finger
She sat and wrote
In her own blood
Suicide note

Her sister was
The first to find
Her crumpled body
Defunct of life
Her sister does
Not deserve this
After all
She’s only six
Her whole life
The memory
Will haunt her mind
For all to see
The person she
Looked up to
Is now not here
Oh, what to do

The mother next
She hears the scream
Comes in the room
And in a dream
She sees the body
Her first-born child
A bloody corpse
With a sickly smile
She looks around
Face filled with pain
The mother thinks
That she’s to blame
And something snaps
Inside her brain
She never was
The same again

And all her friends
Find out at school
And some move on
Like all should do
But some depressed
Sick of their lives
Go home to bed
Take out their knives
And carve their own
Names in their throat
Or put a rope around
And choke
One suicide done
Without respect
To causing a
Domino effect

First suicide
Causing all this pain
But who’s the one
We all should blame
The sister who
Gets her own way?
The mother who
Refused to pay?
The absent father
Where’s he gone?
The friends at school
Who’ve done no wrong?
There’s only one
Who should be blamed
Suicidee
Who’ll not be named

Lets get this clear
Cos’ it’s a fact
Suicides such
A selfish act
She did not care
Or give a thought
To all the ones
That she would hurt
They don’t understand
They wonder why
They blame themselves
Deep down inside
Many lives wasted
Many people cried
For the selfish act
Of suicide
©2006-2009 ~relativestranger
:iconrelativestranger:

Author's Comments

I've been reading a lot of poems on this site and any that talk about suicide always end at the suicide. This is supposed to be what happens next. I don't know how accurate it is as luckily enough i have never known anyone commit suicide.

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:iconon-my-mind:
I like how there is not much words in each lines which kinda gives the sense fo dread to it to enhance the poem. This is great and really catches you in.
:icongarnet-43:
Well written. Thought provoking. As you said in your intro, a refreshing break from the usual point of view.

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"And the day came when the risk to remain tight in a bud was more painful than the risk it took to blossom." - Anais Nin
:iconirishhellgirl:
=(

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:iconirishhellgirl:
strange how similar some of those facts are to someone

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:iconrelativestranger:
really who? the sister is six as it rhymes, friendfs thing is from a journal i read where they said a thrd one of there friends from school had killed themselves...its not aimed at you or anyone else, except in the general way of DONT COMMIT SUICIDE!

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:iconpunknera:
I liked the shortened lines but I think the rhyming scheme was distracting (sometimes there, sometimes not). The rhyming in this kind of piece is really not needed, it's great with or without it!

I do want to say, however, that suicides don't usually cause a chain reaction (except in those cases of mass suicides, but they're not done because of the first, but all at once). That was the only part that bothered because it was a little unrealistic.

The rest of it was very real and very, very good!

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:iconirishhellgirl:
ok

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:iconrelativestranger:
i can draw ur attention to a journal read recently and the experiences of my sister in sa then. The journal was entitled im sorry..again. My sister said in sa one person in her class commited suicide nd 2 other peopole did in the next year, both cited the original suicide as helping to push them over edge in there notes.

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Imagine a world with no hypotheticals
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( . .)
c('')('') This is Shadow-Bunny. Copy him into your signature to help him to beat the living dayshits outta his fatfuck brother and dominate the world!
:iconrelativestranger:
:P

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Imagine a world with no hypotheticals
(\ /)
( . .)
c('')('') This is Shadow-Bunny. Copy him into your signature to help him to beat the living dayshits outta his fatfuck brother and dominate the world!
:iconirishhellgirl:
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