This is a first time read for me, and I enjoyed it. Nothing to critique.

nice work man.
have you watched that show "over there" ?

my fav part...

"A bullet crashes in his back,
Another sets him free,
Looks up into the stranger’s face,
Last sight the young man sees"

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'i am attempting to kill, the little boy inside.'

yes i was editing it to get a picture of over there on it. i found this pic though and it is better

other than i don't .. respect... rhyme (sry to all u devout rhymers), its good... though.. the last line: though its not the same meaning--

for"just another war"

i dunno- seems to flow better

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looking like a million bucks, so no one can see you're just a two-cent heartbreak whore.

TROMBONES do it in seven positions

yeah it was written round time britain et america was attacking iraq and claiming it was a just war. To me there is no such thing and that was the point of the last line. Urs does flow better but the meaning is important.

Apologies for constant rhyming, i seriously cannot write without rhyming it just gets stck half way through

I really like this. I've always been a concientious objector. Anyone who actively signs themself up to the armed forces are just handing their lives to the government as property. I've had many a debate about this: "oh but I'm serving my country." What for? We aren't at war out of self defence, everyone knows that. My argument stands.

That last line I agree with you, the meaning is very important. I think it still flows just as well too.

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If you tremble indignation at every injustice, then you are a comrade of mine - Ernesto Guevara
Health can’t be privatized because it is a fundamental human right, nor can education, water, electricity and other public services - Hugo Chavez

yeah as i am also a concientious objector and a pacifist i totally agree with what ur saying. I do not have national pride at the moment anyway as i do not believe the current government has the countries best interests at heart i do not feel that i want to serve it in any way. That doesn't mean i dont want to help people but people and the populace are different things altogether

nah its okay.. im one of like 3 people in the world who dislike it.. i never was one for pleasing my public though

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looking like a million bucks, so no one can see you're just a two-cent heartbreak whore.

TROMBONES do it in seven positions

oh yeah, totally agree. This country has never had a government with the best interests of the proletarian at heart. Bet that's not a term you hear often in the context of Britain. Years of Conservative rule has widened the class divide leading to an insurgency of a degenerate underclass that are breeding like rabbits in some of the poorest council estates with pushchairs at the age of 14. Proud to be British? Education, Education, Education? How about rising tuition fees and kids entering secondary school unable to read and write? The solution: additional support classes. Yeah why not? Put them in a room with five other underachievers and treat them like they're totally stupid while they know that there are other kids who don't have to do that. That's going to make them feel really special isn't it? Why not teach them properly in primary school in the first place?? That's either gross mismanagement of the education system or a conspiracy to dumb down the lower classes even further into submission, leaving kids with no hope for the future. Then they can say to them, hey, now you have two choices. Serve your country in the armed forces, be a hero and kill foreigners who have never mattered to you in the past, or end up either on jobseekers allowance or work in a call centre with a monthly staff turnover because basically anyone can do it? 1997 seemed like a good year, but Labour have let me down as well now; I don't see anything getting any better. I don't think I need to tell you my reasoning behind that; I can see you are well informed.

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If you tremble indignation at every injustice, then you are a comrade of mine - Ernesto Guevara
Health can’t be privatized because it is a fundamental human right, nor can education, water, electricity and other public services - Hugo Chavez

the thing is when people start to go o about the class divide i also wonder where i fit in. Growing up on the 'wrong side of the tracks' but its not like i was ever poor and on top of that i definitely am not one of the poor bastards that have to sit in the SEN classes. Glad to be getting through uni before all these new fees come in though. True what u say about the call centres as well, and that cannot improve the general state of affairs when any problem the average joe has with a product or service cannot be dealt with as the people at the other end of the phone are too stupid to deal with it. Yes labour have let me down. Unfortunately the tories are worse and even the liberals are moving more right wing.