Love poetry eh? Interesting. Not your usual topic, but you kept your style very closely. Its sad that people actually think this way though. Live life, do what you can, and accept what you can't.

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Interested?

Open up your mind a bit. [link]

Can you see it? [link]

this about you doll? i know you'd be worth it for anyone, so i hope you don't feel you're not. Take care.

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It is okay to talk to inanimate objects...but when they start answering you, That is NOT a good sign.

meh, for someone. was mistake anyway

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Imagine a world with no hypotheticals
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c('')('') This is Shadow-Bunny. Copy him into your signature to help him to beat the living dayshits outta his fatfuck brother and dominate the world!

noone is worth what some people put themselves through when they lose someone

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Imagine a world with no hypotheticals
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c('')('') This is Shadow-Bunny. Copy him into your signature to help him to beat the living dayshits outta his fatfuck brother and dominate the world!

Well i guess that depends on what you think someone should go through. But it stands to reason that what they deserve is to live on without the person.

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Interested?

Open up your mind a bit. [link]

Can you see it? [link]

okay.

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It is okay to talk to inanimate objects...but when they start answering you, That is NOT a good sign.

Good structuring, and the meter of it flows quite well, though some of the sacrifices you made in order to make the meter work sting the readability of it slightly.

"The stars all say, though really I do not believe in fate"

...That's the place where it's sticks out for me most. I can understand why you wrote it that way but, without the punctuation or added words it flows well yet, doesn't read quiet as well.

The theme of the fourth line in every stanza however, and the subtle changes you make to it during the course of the poem: brilliant.
I especially enjoyed the middle stanza's "I am not worth it" (which I read with considerable stress on the 'am' ) as the emotions climax.

Great poem. Heart wrenching, when I read it I feel the tightness in my chest as though it were me.

I gleaned from other posts that this is, perhaps, a sensitive subject for you. I have no place to comment on such matters, and thus I comment on the poem itself, though I could go on I'll leave that as your choice... I hope this has caused you no distress, as I have nothing but admiration for it.

Again, brilliant. Thanks for sharing.

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Nemo_Outis

I'm interested to know which words you think are missing.
However thank you for your comments and critique, I'm not complaining about them though it may sound like it.

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Imagine a world with no hypotheticals
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c('')('') This is Shadow-Bunny. Copy him into your signature to help him to beat the living dayshits outta his fatfuck brother and dominate the world!

This is just to inform you that I have not forgotten you, and I will be looking at this at my first real opportunity. Just as soon as the University lets me get to bed before 3a.m.

You deserve a real answer, I intend to give it. I hope I haven't offended you with the grievous amount of time it has taken me!

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Nemo_Outis